Word Works
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Number 129 November 2004
Published by the Boise State Writing Center


From the Vault: Peer Response
 

                        Students usually do not have time to seek peer review and write multiple
                            drafts unless a course is structured to encourage a more extended writing
                            process for challenging writing tasks.


                                               -Lee Ann Carroll
                                               Rehearsing New Roles: How College Students Develop as Writers

 

For those of you who have been following along this semester, welcome to the third classic cut from the Word Works vault. This time around the focus is on peer response-students responding to other students' texts. Though long known as a valuable means of prompting revision, peer response is not always embraced in courses, often understandably.  As Rick Leahy points out in the article below, structuring effective responses takes time and effort. Yet the rewards can be well worth it, and Rick details some ways to overcome certain hurdles to the process. Even though it is late in the semester, many courses still have papers due, and now can be an excellent time to consider allowing students some time to read and comment on one another's work.

Before jumping to the article, and before closing out this stretch of WW, I want to let you know that the classic cuts we've presented are but a bit of the store we have in the vault. There are several excellent articles stashed down in our metaphorical basement (our literal filing-cabinet drawer). And, we want to make those available to you. Toward that goal, our consultants are putting the finishing touches on an annotated bibliography of early WW articles. We'll have that bibliography online next semester so that you can browse through it. If and when you find something that looks interesting and you'd like a copy, just let us know and we'll send one to you. In short, you'll now have access to our basement, and to all the copies of Word Works.

Also, we have some changes in store for the Writing Center next term, to make us more accessible to more writers. We'll be opening up an online consultation service, and providing writers the opportunity to schedule an appointment through the internet as well as by phone and in person. We'll detail all the changes for you next year.

Until then, enjoy this classic cut from December 1991. As usual, none of the material in Word Works is copyrighted, so if you find something you would like to use, feel free to print or download, or to create a link to us.

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Word Works #48: December 1991

“Peer Responses to Drafts”
Rick Leahy

One way to get better quality in student papers is to have students share their drafts in peer groups before they hand in their final copies for grades. In these groups, they read their drafts to each other, give feedback, and offer suggestions for revision. This strategy is common in writing courses, where peer critiques fit in naturally. But it is also catching on across the curriculum. Students in many kinds of courses--history, geology, anthropology, music--benefit from the chance to try out their drafts on an audience of their peers.

Benefits

Teachers who have used peer-group responses have found that good things can happen.

  • The writer puts more of an investment into the writing, knowing that a draft will be examined by two or three fellow students.

  • Students see what others are doing with the same assignment. This helps them get a clearer perspective on their own work.

  • Class members gain an increased spirit of cooperation and mutual support.

  • Peer feedback on a draft can improve the finished product As a result, responding to papers become less time-consuming and stressful for the instructor.

Making peer responses productive  

To reap the benefits, though, takes a certain amount of planning and effort; groups don't automatically work well if set loose without clear procedures and rules.

The most important strategy is to ask students to give each other specific, descriptive responses. Nothing kills a group's response to a paper quicker than the vague noise of approval students are wont to give each other's drafts: "That was good!" "Wow, that's a lot better than my draft." "That really flowed." After such remarks, the group feels there's nothing more to say. The one person who does have a reservation or question may decide to keep quiet in the face of such overwhelming approval. Or, if a draft is so weak that no one can fail to notice, the group may make no response at all, because no one wants to hurt the writer's feelings.

So the first thing to insist on is that groups avoid making evaluative comments of any kind until late in the discussion. The initial responses to a draft should be descriptive. A powerful all-purpose format for descriptive response has been developed by Peter Elbow and Pat Belanoff in their textbook, A Community of Writers. They use a set of four responses, to be given in the following order:

1. Pointing. Which words, phrases, or features of the writing do you find most striking or memorable (or what do you like the best)? This response tells the writer what the audience is most likely to remember from the draft.

2. Summarizing. What do you hear the piece saying? What's the main meaning or message? This response tells the writer whether the audience can understand what the draft is trying to say.

3. What's almost said or implied. What do you think the writer is going to say but doesn't? What ideas seem to hover around the edges? What do you end up wanting to hear more about? This powerful response tells the writer if the draft is "tugging" in a different direction from the one the writer intends. In revising, the writer may try to correct the "tug" or go with it, refocusing the paper in a new direction.

4. Center of gravity. What do you sense as the generative center or source of energy? (The center of gravity might not be the main point. Sometimes an image, phrase, detail, or digression seems a point of special life or weight in the piece. The center of gravity might be something minor that is "trying" to be major.) This is another way of getting at things that might be "tugging" the draft in a different direction. Unlike response #3, which identifies hints, this response identifies things in the draft that may be causing interference.

Notice that none of these four responses is evaluative, yet together they give the writer a great deal of specific information on how the draft has affected its audience. The group may go on to give some evaluative responses--but now the responses won't be vague and unhelpful, because they'll be informed by the descriptive responses already given.

Elbow and Belanoff's descriptive response form is only one possibility. You can make up your own response format to fit each assignment. For an argumentative paper, for example, you might have the group think up opposing arguments the writer should anticipate and deal with. If possible, avoid questions calling for yes-no answers, because they tend to close down discussion rather than open it up.

It's wise not to ask students to respond to too many questions. Five is about maximum. More than that will overwhelm the group and prompt them to run down the list in a perfunctory manner rather than engage in a real discussion of each one. And, once the groups catch on to the procedure, don't get upset if they don't follow the format exactly. It's not unusual for the more productive groups to develop their own response styles that, for them, work better than the prescribed format.

If you've given a very specific or detailed assignment, you might require each group to have a copy of the assignment in front of them, so that they can make sure each draft actually follows the written directions.

Five frequently asked questions about how to make groups work

How should I make up the groups? Most teachers favor heterogeneous grouping--mixing ability levels and demographics. Early in the semester, of course, you don't know your students' abilities and so can't mix them up that way. But as least you can mix men and women, younger and older students, ESL and native English speakers.

In a heterogeneous group, the stronger writers can help the weaker ones; the students with more academic and life experience can help those with less. You might think that the better writers and more "seasoned" students would resent being slowed down, but usually they don't. Indeed, they often benefit, because they are forced to explain things clearly to other members of the group. They also learn to see more in their own writing from working with others who have trouble seeing their writing clearly.

If I use groups frequently, is it better to keep them the same groups all semester or switch them around? There's no easy answer. The advantage of keeping the same groups is that, once people get comfortable with each other, their responses become more honest and useful. The groups also develop a sense of mutual loyalty and support, and they might resent being broken up. The advantage of switching groups, on the other hand, is that writers get the benefit of different kinds of responses each time.

Most teachers seem to feel that the advantages of keeping the same groups outweigh those of shuffling groups. But if, by mid-semester, some groups are clearly not working productively together, it's definitely time to shuffle them.

Should students bring copies of their drafts for the whole group to see? If papers are fairly short (up to about 6 pages), the group can get by without copies. In that case, it's extremely helpful  to require the writer to read the paper twice. The first time through, the group can catch what the draft is saying; they need to listen a second time to discern how the draft is written. The double reading does, of course, take extra time, but the time is well spent.

You can save time by having everyone bring an extra copy or two, so that groups can follow along with the oral reading. This way there need only be one reading. You must be careful, though, to insist that the writer (or better yet, someone else in the group) read the draft aloud. Some groups are inclined, if you don't watch them, to read each other's drafts silently. The reading aloud is essential, so that everyone's attention is focused on the same words at the same time.

How large should the groups be? Any group should have at least three members, so that each writer can get two different responses. If the groups do a good job of responding, they take 15-20 minutes for each four- or five-page paper. For a 50-minute period, then, groups of three is about maximum. For a 75-minute class, four is max. It is better for a group to finish early than to rush their responses to the last draft. Don't add latecomers to groups that are already full. If the number of students doesn't work out right, the "leftover" people can be paired up rather than put with full groups.

Should I collect the drafts and comment on them? You don't have to, especially if your time is short. Collecting drafts, on the other hand, will help you head off potentially serious problems, ones that the groups may not catch. If you do collect the drafts to read yourself, try having everyone write memos telling you their own thoughts on their drafts and summarizing the group's responses (see Word Works #44 on the author's memo).

As an alternative, you could leave the choice up to the students: they may give you their drafts for feedback if they want to. Those that take advantage of your offer will almost invariably hand in better finished papers, if they pay attention to the feedback you give them.

Whether students are required to hand in the drafts or not, you can still make the drafts mandatory for full credit on an assignment. On draft-reading day, take roll of drafts as well as of students.

Some problems with groups, and some possible solutions

Despite the benefits, some teachers are reluctant to try groups--or, because of a bad experience with them once, are reluctant to try again. Peer-response groups don't automatically work well, it's true. Students need time to get used to them, and they need guidance for getting the most out of them.

Certain tendencies can keep groups from working well.

  • Students are too kind to each other; they don't tell each other what they really think of a draft.

        The descriptive response format, described above, prevents this problem for most students, but some are slow to catch on. It usually helps to tell writers, "When your draft is before the group, you are president. You call the shots. You can insist that the group keep working until they give you substantial responses.

  • Students don't trust each other's responses; they think only the teacher is qualified to judge their writing.

        This is a symptom of dualistic thinking on the part of some students (see Word Works #42). One way to combat this attitude is to explain, "Sure, some of the things your group tells you may be wrong. I can be just as wrong when I read your paper. They are giving you as honest a picture as they can of what your writing did to them. Their responses are worth listening to."

  • Students don't know what to make of the feedback they get on their drafts. It doesn't lead to effective revision.

        True, sometimes it doesn't--usually more out of laziness, though, than the inability to interpret peer responses. Part of the solution is to allow time for careful revision before the paper is due, and to explain--insist--that effective revision is a re-thinking of the paper, not just a cosmetic job.

  • Group members cause confusion by giving contradictory responses.

        This is reality. Different readers do respond in different ways. How many of us have submitted articles to journals and been baffled by conflicting reviewers' comments? For student writers, it's an opportunity to consider what their writing does to real audiences. They must learn that, in the end, they have to make their own tough decisions about their writing.

  • Group work takes up too much valuable class time.

Indeed, for each assignment you have to give up a whole class period to peer critiques, and the demands of your course content might make the sacrifice impossible. On the other hand, when groups are discussing drafts, real learning often takes place. In the process of discussing their writing, students will almost inevitably discuss quite a lot of content, too.

There is, of course, no way to completely overcome the problems. As with any "system," when human beings try to carry it out nothing goes precisely as planned. But careful training of the class helps. If time allows, you might devote an hour of class time to the discussion of one or two sample drafts, pointing out the important features of an effective response to the assignment. This helps students know what to look for in each other's drafts.

 

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